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The seeds that were sown upon my being
turned into grief and disbelieving.
Moisture and despair; for you where not there.
Cautious fumbling with the broken strings,
knotting and seperating these fragile things.
  
Salvation comes upon me,
The seeds that were sown
stopped my hardships and pleading.

The shards won't touch me anymore,
they fly past me as I start running
I feel the breeze striking against my cheeks

I'm running towards this catcher of mine.
: )
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woodsman123452001 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2009
Very nice BL.
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BloomingLotus Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you very much for the comment and favourite. I'm very happy you appreciate my writings so much :)
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woodsman123452001 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2009
Same here BL -- I think you write in a very open and honest fashion. No pretense :)
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BloomingLotus Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you very much. I appreciate your support very much. I am very glad you like my style. Sometimes I wish tough my style wasn't so ''open and honest''. I sometimes feel im not writing poems, just rhyming text. But what makes a poem a poem? I want to try writing poems that don't rhyme too, but that sound good. Mostly when I don't make them rhyme there is no pattern and it turns out very random and weak. Do you have any tips on this?
Sorry for asking all this.
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woodsman123452001 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2009
Hey BL: I am no expert, but I think that you are hard on yourself -- if you are enjoying the writing just go with it. Also, I think you could write lyrics, which would go in 3 or 4 line stanzas, the first or last line could tie each stanza to the previous stanza in meter and rhyme. :) I'll write one for you later :)
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BloomingLotus Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
allright ^^ thank you :)
I just want to improve :3
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woodsman123452001 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2009
Me too :)
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BloomingLotus Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
*I want to try writing poems that don't rhyme too, but that sound good.

*but they don't sound good
:P
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